Whither scene? It may seem archaic, but I prefer to know where something is taking place. Consider, as an opening sentence for a chapter:
"The morning sky was overcast, but it failed to mute the constant din of activity in the port of Lisbon as Lord De La Warr and the former Marchioness disembarked."
Or:
"As Lord De La Warr and the former Marchioness disembarked, the morning sky was overcast, and failed to mute the constant din of activity in the port of Lisbon."
No, no, no, no.
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